Question

Why cant you see?

Theres nothing else you should be!

Its so strange for someone to genuinely care!

To give me there love to share!

Around you I tend to squeal

I cant believe this is actually for real!

You are anything but snooty

And in me u see beauty!

You don’t mind that im strange

And you never ever want me to change

You think im too good for you

When I know its not true

I don’t know how

I got so lucky to be with someone so…wow

I know you’ll be there when I cry

Because your just that great a guy.

You never sleep!

You’re the one I gotta keep

Why must we be so far apart

Answer 1

You, I would let into my heart.

I will never ask for much

Only to know your touch

Kissing my lips

Your hands running down my hips

I’d walk many a mile

just to see your smile

You make me feel sooooo special


I bet to feel your kiss

Would be total blisssss

You make me feel good inside and out

And without a doubt in my mind

You the best amn thing im ever gonna find :)

Answer 2

i wrote it tell me what you think :)

Answer 3

sitting here on this lonely dock ....watch the rain playing on the ocean top....all the things i feel i need to say ...i cant explain in any other way.........................///i wrote it tell me what u think?;)

Answer 4

i like it alot!!! :) its rlyyyyyy cute but still deep. You wrote it? :D i wrote this one obviously ^^

Answer 5

i made it for my ingo :) ^_^

Answer 6

i hope he likes it ^_^

Answer 7

the 2nd one is so much easier to read as a poem.. the first is a bit clunky but still good for someone who doesn't do it much/been published.

Answer 8

:) so ya there is an easier to read version :) http://openstudy.com/groups/writing%20and%20english#/groups/writing%20and%20english/updates/4db37f0076e08b0b11bc8d28

Answer 9

:) so ya there is an easier to read version :) http://openstudy.com/groups/writing%20and%20english#/groups/writing%20and%20english/updates/4db37f0076e08b0b11bc8d28

Answer 10

good work

Answer 11

:) yay!!!! woooo!!! good enough to publish? read the other one about my mommy :) gotten most positive feedback about that one :)