Question

Here is a poem i wrote im putting it in the comment so it will fit!! ^^ pls comment :)

Answer 1

I cant believe how much i cant do

Why cant i be with you!!

You make me smile more than ever

They say, let him go, NEVER!!!

I just want them to see

Please i beg you to agree

I want you to realize how much he means

No, dont say oh ur only in your teens!!!

Didnt you ever have that person who made

you feel like with one look he could make the world fade

You cant help but laugh when he is around

And he picks you up when your down :)

I just wanna wrap my arms around ur neck

to bring you back down when ur a wreck :)

ooh just go on your desire

rile it up and let it fire!!

make me want you even more

You know who this body was made for >:D

Drown urself in me dont just take sips

Come on, let me feel ur lips

i want to be under your body

i truly am your dolly :)

never let me go!!

i will wrap my legs around u like a bow

Your never leaving

oh u kno im teasing :)

u make me want more than i thought i ever would!

And ik u'd be so good :)

With you is where i want to be!!

So plesssss never give up on me!

So mom cant u see the way i feel for him!

no! this isnt some teenage whim!!!

If you dont let me go i'll go on my own

the way he makes me moan

nope Im not ur little girl any longer

with every day i grow stronger :)

I will always love you

u know thats true...

but something bout that boy

makes me feel like more than just a toy :)

Now i hope u understand my point of view

honestly nothing else u CAN do.

he is mine now and he knos it

My heart has reached the limit

I love you mom so much

but i LIVE to feel his touch!!!!!!

goodbye now mother

sorry but he just isnt like any other :)

Answer 2

have you read Romeo and Juliet?

Answer 3

You should read that

Answer 4

Yes ^_^

Answer 5

i have. what do u think of it? besides all the texting lingo lol

Answer 6

yeah, i'm unsure about the emoticons...

Answer 7

this is a rl scenario tho not based off Romeo and Juliet ^^

Answer 8

and yea i dont know what i was thinking with those >.< lol

Answer 9

yeah, but romeo and juliet captures the same concept

Answer 10

Yea i just now realized that when u said something
lol

Answer 11

so you could check how shakespeare wrote and created imagery and emotions about thesame general idea of forbidden relationships

Answer 12

True, very true. good idea. Overall do you think it is a passionate good poem? :)

Answer 13

I was thinking that maybe if you wanted better responses and critique that you could try a poetry forum like :

http://wildpoetryforum.com/phpBB3/index.php
http://allpoetry.com/
http://www.thepoetryforum.co.uk/
http://www.thepoetsanctuary.net/

I'm not the best at this

Answer 14

ohhh, alright :) Thanks though! ya i want to get my poetry published and encourage other people my age to try poetry as a channel for expression however i think u have to 18 to try to publish anything dont u ?

Answer 15

i'm not sure

Answer 16

>.< dang it I just wanna get my work out there!! I mean im pretty sure that you can win money in some cases for your poetry! but i dont want to enter and win and not be able to claim my money ^^

Answer 17

yeah, but your competition would include people who really hone their craft and write and critique their own and really work at, just vomiting out words

Answer 18

*not just

Answer 19

True, but you think im vomiting out words? >:o lol

Answer 20

What is it? :) lol and thanks!

Answer 21

You can be published at any age. Either publish yourself, or find a publisher willing to publish you.

Answer 22

Hmmmmm you just made my day, do you think my poem deserves to be published?

Answer 23

need alot more work.. keep working on it

Answer 24

>.< Yes it does in some aspects but do u think i captured the passion of the situation well? :)

Answer 25

hell to the yah

Answer 26

recent writing from math chat:
One word that comes to mind when I hear your name? Amazing. No words can accurately even begin to describe the way i feel for you! But these are the closest to it (: I don't usually get addicted to people....but i guess your the acception aren't you? Your the first guy who actually cares about my personality, you love my body of course, but you love my personality along with it! (: You are so crazy, but i love it! I love the way you hug your laptop when we are apart and that's the way we must talk, I love the way your super weird, and say the strangest things to make me laugh! I love how you always say "ahm.." I love how romantic you are, the way most guys just never are. I love the way you care. Im sooooo glad i met you!! Your the first guy that captures my heart, and keeps it (: I love the way when you get ideas you paint pictures in my head! But Most of all, I love you (:

Answer 27

glad to see you keep writing.

Answer 28

Thanks (: i will always write!!