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owlfred · Answer

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anonymous · Answer

As the pink and orange weave together to paint a summer sunset the water of a stream is in my toes and the grass is soft beneath my golden brown hand the brezze tickls my skin and blows my soft hair as the wind whispers in my ear

anonymous · Answer

Nice, can I make a suggestion?:)

anonymous · Answer

yes yes you can

anonymous · Answer

Ok, dont be offended but I think it would flow better if you split it up.  I feel that its more of a runnon sentence:)

anonymous · Answer

thats just a draft like i didnt care bout the punctuation just wanted to see how it would sound then do all the editing?

anonymous · Answer

ok, cool(Ivy's idea)  have you tried listening to music as you right that has to deal with the mood?

anonymous · Answer

yep i was actully doing that

anonymous · Answer

:D It works AWESOME @ Arky hey do u know Krumbell on AP? He does the listening to music thing too!! :D

anonymous · Answer

Hmm then try dead silence. or being outside (:

anonymous · Answer

oh i got one!

anonymous · Answer

Sometimes, just writing without editing in poem form works really good.  Editing can destroy the mood sometimes:)

anonymous · Answer

Ill just randomly think of something right now...here we goooo...

anonymous · Answer

The ash glistens with a heavenly tear,
washing away all I fear,
then I laugh and fall near,
to that place I wonce held dear.

anonymous · Answer

Yea i can totally ruin a piece of writing.... especially poems.. the passion can be removed... thas why so much of my poetry is so.. RAW... lol like this!! :

RAW

You wanna know what i am? im raw.
I'm real im me, and i leave u in awe
I don't ever hide.
I'm not afraid to be this girl inside
I tackle you, i attack
I'm not afraid to act a little wack!
I wont let your words hurt my core
But i WILL always leave you wanting more
Dont let this exterior fool your mind
Oh please, search until you find
This heart that swells with love and joy
but treat me with care, im not a toy
Oh please don't think im mean
just because unlike you i don't need to make a scene
im real im me, and i leave you in awe
This is what i am, im RAW

anonymous · Answer

heh (:

anonymous · Answer

Raw is always better...usually:)

anonymous · Answer

Ya.... usually ^_^

anonymous · Answer

wow thats really good keep up all the awesome poems

anonymous · Answer

that is brilliant

anonymous · Answer

Haha thanks!! ;D