Can someone revise this for me please?(:

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I'm working on it, but I haven't finished yet. So far I would say that the informational part is worth an A+, it flows nicely and has a great pace to it, its perfect. The only part I'm still working on is the ending where you state your opinion. I'll get back to you on that point.

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Does this work? Does it at least give you some ideas?

 When the world was much younger, tobacco was a great thing.  It was a large part of the world market and separated classes in countries, the men from the boys, as the saying goes.  That worked for a while.  The world is not as young anymore and in my humble opinion, needs to give up old habits.  The World market does not rely on tobacco anymore.  Tobacco has also been found to be a killer.  Why keep it around? Tobacco companies know all this, and keep this knowledge close to their chests, that’s why they keep advertising to younger and younger audiences. We, as a world must make tobacco illegal, it might cost thousands of people their jobs now, but how many lives will we save by acting now, and not later?