Question

i have a summer essay that i am wondering if the main paragraph (s) should be one big paragraph or a bunch of small ones

Answer 1

this is the file

Answer 2

Your paragraph containing your thesis statement should be a tad larger than the rest.
Your body paragraphs should be roughly 4-5 sentences, but they need to restate your position and provide evidence from one reason in your thesis.

Answer 3

ummm, im sorry could you say that a bit more simply? if you told me that in person i would probably understand it, but in text its a little hard to understand

Answer 4

thesis, if you could invite any four people in the world, dead or alive, to a dinner party, who would you choose and why?

Answer 5

oops, i posted the wrong file

Answer 6

here is the essay

Answer 7

Oh, I see.

Your Introductory Paragraph should contain one reason each for the figures you've stated you would like to meet.

Your body paragraph(s) (Add a transition word before each paragraph, IE; Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly, Fourth and foremostly, ETC,)
should only discuss one person and state what you believe is interesting about them and several of their accomplishments.

Your Conclusion should restate everything in your introductory paragraph but re-worded.

A few tips too.
Avoid asking questions unless it's prompted.
EX: I would ask about his thought process, how did his genius and mind work?
Revision: I would ask about his thought process, it's a wonder how a genius works a mind such as Leonardo does.

It's good to avoid wordiness, but don't make your essay too long.
Your teachers hate reading long essays as much as you hate writing long essays.
So Have your essay fully discuss the topic, provide insight or background knowledge, but don't include information that isn't relevant or building up to the topic.

Answer 8

thanks you so much, that helps a LOT

Answer 9

No problem. ;)