Question

Can someone proofread my writing?

Answer 1

A perfectionist is someone who has to have everything right. I'm not a perfectionist, but I like things a certain way. In the story, "The Possibility of Evil," a woman named Miss Strangeworth was that perfectionist.

There are many traits that fit Miss Strangeworth, but one main trait was miss perfect. First, one example would be how she wanted everything right and her way especially when she wrote her secret gossip letters. Another example would be she had to be on time for everything and no to delay turning something in. Last example would be she wanted her town to be the very best just like her home was. I would like to be on time for things just not too early and I also would like my city and home to look good, but not going over the top. In conclusion, Miss Strangeworth is a woman who's quick and fast on her feet to do everything.

As you can see, a trait that describes Miss Strangeworth is miss perfect. If you just like her, you get everything done faster and don't have time to procrastinate, you can relax. Even though you might not wait till the last minute or day late, but you decide to work on something three or two more days ahead before it's due, you're not like Miss Strangeworth exactly. You have your own way of things.

Answer 2

A perfectionist is someone who has to have everything right. I'm not a perfectionist, but I like things a certain way. In the story, "The Possibility of Evil," a woman named Miss Strangeworth was(is) that perfectionist.

There are many traits that fit Miss Strangeworth, but one main(you might try "one predominant trait") trait was miss perfect.(miss perfect? you could probably find another trait to fit in here.) First, one example( I think this would be better worded without the 'first') would be how(that) she wanted everything right and her way especially when she wrote her secret gossip(gossiping) letters. Another example would be (that) she had to be on time for everything and no to(i think you meant not to instead of no to) delay turning something in. Last example( a final example) would be she wanted her town to be the very best(the very best ever or the very best it could be? clarification here...) just(the way) like(delete like) her home was. (Personally, )I would like to be on time for things just not too early and(delete; new sentence, starting with ->) I also would(would also) like my city and home to look good, but not going over the top. In conclusion, Miss Strangeworth is a woman who's quick and fast on her feet to do everything. (This closing sentence does not really relate to the fact that Miss Strangeworth is a perfectionist; it more implies that she likes to have things done, not necessarily correctly)

As you can see, a trait that describes Miss Strangeworth is miss perfect(again...?). If you (are) just(delete) like(similiar to) her, you get everything done faster and don't have time to(actually, you do have time to procrastinate, but you would rather not) procrastinate, (so) you can relax (once the work is all done). Even(If) though(delete) you might not(delete) wait till the last minute or day late, but(if) you decide to work on something three or two more days ahead before it's due, you're not like Miss Strangeworth exactly. You have your own way of things. (are these last two sentences nessecary? they don't really fit in with the theme of the rest of the essay)
This is a good essay, although it did have flaws like everything does. You might want to get an idea what your teacher likes in an essay (every teacher is different) so you can better fit his or her preferences in the future to get a better grade.