Question

I'm taking English 102 and I need a lot of help, can someone help me?

Answer 1

What's wrong with my thesis, The author, Katherine Mansfield in the story “Miss Brill”. Expression of the scenery and music events pleased Miss Brill and the chill never made her uncomfortable, as she had worn her fur.

Answer 2

is your thesis on the author or on Miss Brill

Answer 3

This thesis says 2 things:
1) Expression of the scenery and music events (author's expression I assume) pleased Miss Brill, but also made her uncomfortable ( which did which, i.e. musicor scenery made her uncomfortable/pleased her?)
2) She wore fur (Not clear how this is related to scenery or music)

A thesis statement should clearly outline the overall idea of your paper; yours is not specific/concise enough.

Answer 4

Is better,

The Author, Katherine Mansfield, influence the settings, character and all events are revolving around Miss Brill.