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OpenStudy (anonymous):

Rewrite the following sentence to eliminate flowery language. I was glum, tired, frustrated, and not at all in the mood for my annoying, penetrating, monotonous, repetitive alarm clock, which had been, unbeknownst to me and contrary to my desires, reset by my obnoxious little sister, to ring so frustratingly, unexpectedly, irrationally early in the morning. I was frustrated from my annoying alarm clock which had been aggravating me besides my little sister early in the morning.

OpenStudy (anonymous):

Haha, I answered this in yankeefan41095's post.

OpenStudy (anonymous):

Mentally and physically fatigued, my mood could not bear the peircing sound of my alarm, intrusively reset by my little sister to ring at an irrational hour.

OpenStudy (anonymous):

No, no... ELIMINATE the flowery language. Like this... I was tired and annoyed because my little sister reset my alarm clock to wake me very early.

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