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Any good ideeas for this paper? Especially in rhythm and word choice @Writing

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Click Below to read ! :)

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thanks 4 the medal:D

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welcome

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did u get my fan news

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I am viewing your file right now.

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It needs some polishing.

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like what? im open to suggestions

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Give me a moment :)

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kk :)

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Take you time :) and thx so much.

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I am here to help, so you know :)

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Can I post some sentences from it over here?

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k um... miss president who were u talking 2 :D

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Angel. Whom else could I be helping here?

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um me sorry

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Angel, I need to know what class you are in, so that I do not use... vocabulary which could be too serious.

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LOL! sk8, all good!

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7

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sorry i was eating and you may you have permission to edit even

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Ah, I was right. Your type of writing indicates young age :)))

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wait angle what grade r u in

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7

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You see, if you have a paper corrected by an M.A. person, they will use words that you do not use in the elementary.

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So, let me correct any spelling or punctuation mistakes first.

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k thx sooo much

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and @sk84life cool :)

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:)

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i thougt i was the only 7th grader

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nope :)

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Girl, I have a problem understanding this sentence: The whole restaurant is abuzz with the chatter of booths upon booths of people.

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specifically: the chatter of booths upon booths of people...

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like all the people talking

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Ok, I will word it differently :)

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Okie doke!

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hay u guys can yall do me a fav and become a member on my study group called skateboarding

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plzz:)

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shure where it at?

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u know when u go to join study groups scroll down and it should be there

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Gurl, I am almost done.

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Once I am finished, I am going to uploaded here.

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kk. i love you so much right now lol

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angle

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ya?

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did u find it

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ya i joined

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I will change the order of the paragraphs.

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thanx sooooo much

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fine with me :)

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when your done you can send it to me at Magicalmysterychick@gmail.com or attach it below

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your r welcome sk84life

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u can call me ty

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k u can call angeique

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can i call u angle

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ya shure but its spelled angel lol :D

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oh come on!!! Angle? She is Angel!!!

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oops mb i feel so stupid 4 that

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Angle is in maths. Acute angle, for example.

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lol

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I am joking around with you sk8! :)

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(ok, back to the essay) - last revision

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k

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hows tha essay

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r u good at math 2 lol

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kinda wht about u

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well i mm in advanced math (pre-algebra) so i guess so but i hate homework

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r u almost finished(not to rush you)

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rigth im in pre -algebra 2

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wht school do u go to

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You live in Houston, right?

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I need the info for the last sentence.

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no in florida

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that sucks is it cold down there

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no its like 80

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sorry its like 60

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Here it is:

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I hope you like the changes. I have to go now, so write what you thought about it and I will read your feedback over here tomorrow :)

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Oh! And I do hope for a medal! ;)

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that iz soo good

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of course!

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So it is ok?

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no its great

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Angel dream girl....please help me out

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YA!

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I am very glad then. The pleasure was all mine :)

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nice meeting u

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Likewise. See you guys around!

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k cool

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Anyone has a fiction story...that they wrote?

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I need 6 page long fiction story.....:(

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noo

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wow

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no i had one buti had to cancle it so my mom will tell me when i can get it back