Question

What do you guys think of this poem i did? put comments and add something if u should fix.

Sweet Dreams
By Kasi Cover
Wishing you were still here
On this earth makes me hurt
Dying inside slowly
Time is racing
Wanting to say I love you again
But knowing that I can't see you
or feel your cold hands
or your wrinkled skin
Makes me want to fall asleep
into a deep dream
and go into a fairytale
follow the path to your chair
sit on your lap and say
I love you great grandma

Answer 1

If i should fix anything

Answer 2

nice ,i like it ...

Answer 3

cool

Answer 4

you have more from this style poems ?

Answer 5

huh