ok I am posting my essay. Hopefully someone will revise it..

1. Please describe why you want to attend the Pharmacy program at Massachusetts College of Pharmacy and Health Sciences. Please also include any impressions that you may have of MCPHS and the Boston area.
I would like to attend the pharmacy program at the Massachusetts College of Pharmacy and Health Sciences (MCPHS) for academic and personal reasons. Boston is an academically thriving city with over 40 colleges in the area which provides a great environment for me to focus on my studies. The college is located near various health

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ok I am posting my essay. Hopefully someone will revise it..

1.	Please describe why you want to attend the Pharmacy program at Massachusetts College of Pharmacy and Health Sciences. Please also include any impressions that you may have of MCPHS and the Boston area.
I would like to attend the pharmacy program at the Massachusetts College of Pharmacy and Health Sciences (MCPHS) for academic and personal reasons. Boston is an academically thriving city with over 40 colleges in the area which provides a great environment for me to focus on my studies.  The college is located near various health

anonymous · Answer

I believe you can post a link to the document that contains your text.

anonymous · Answer

Boston is an academically thriving city with over 40 colleges in the area which provides a great environment for me to focus on my studies. The college is located near various health
In my opinion, "....for me to focus on my studies" to change "for me to pursue my interest"