Hey guys do you think this is a good thesis statement?

Thesis: While the French Revolution of 1789 and the American Revolution of 1776 were similar in terms of economic focus, they differed in their political reasoning and social implications.

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Hey guys do you think this is a good thesis statement?

Thesis: While the French Revolution of 1789 and the American Revolution of 1776 were similar in terms of economic focus, they differed in their political reasoning and social implications.

anonymous · Answer

Yeah looks good to me, you could also try replacing While with Although. Looks fine for a thesis statement since it gives you the major idea of the essay.

anonymous · Answer

I agree with vengeance, and the symmetry of the sentence might improve if you switched politica, reasoning and social implications around. It would just sound better.

anonymous · Answer

SORRY ABOUT THE TYPO