Question

Can you edit my paper asap!!! I am desperate);

Answer 1

I'd be very afraid as well. :(

Answer 2

When I write an essay, I give at least a week to write an essay. I give it time. I can tell by this paper that there are a lot of errors within this paper. I have a feeling this is a college paper as well. Two things are missing within the essay. There is a lack of flow within the piece. I cannot move from one idea to the next without having to figure out where the ideas are going. Second idea, (this is assuming that this is a college paper), is that the paper needs less summary and more argument. What is the point the picture trying to make?

"Those five tentacles represent the five nations that started to trade around 1860s." What is the point being made about these five tentacles? Are the tentacles suggesting some sort of conflict? I'm not sure.

I'm going to attach my edits here as well. They are small grammatical edits and some points where I was confused.

P.S. Wiki is a bad source, because no one knows who the true author is.

Answer 3

If you have questions i'll be online for about 20 mins.