Question

Is anyone patient enough to edit my essay about this topic: Jewish History in Europe from the Middle Ages to WWII, and discuss whether or not the holocaust was in the making for over 700 years. Please & thank you so much in advance!

Answer 1

I'm aware that my paragraphs (body) are freakisly long.. >_<

Answer 2

Also that I have to be consisted with my footnotes.

Answer 3

remove the comma after observe; 1st sentence is run-on; powerful men USED; use a different word than legitimate; was FILLED with; individuals TRIED to find...; again legitimate is not a good word, sounds too casual; 2nd para., 2nd sentence is run-on; doesn't sound very good in the part where u describe the laws made against jews in the roman times, maybe try to re-word the parts before the quotes; use greed-driven twice, try to find a synonym; a better way to strengthen ONE'S nation; again with greed-driven, used too many times; all the jewish men and women from the newly united kingdom Spain assumed as bad influences...; 10000 should be on the same line; no finally in front of Martin Luther; lastly, the Final Solution in March 1941 was when Hitler...; He BELIEVED; WOULD be a war; IN which; use a different word then scapegoat in the last para; otherwise a VERY good essay and I liked it a lot!

Answer 4

thank you for the corrections!

Answer 5

your very welcome!