Question

Hi, can someone review my research paper and tell me if I should send it in now?

Answer 1

I'm going to chunk this up into separate files, because otherwise the comments become difficult to read. Here are the first two paragraphs . . . more to come shortly.

Answer 2

And here's the next paragraph. Everything in the paper has flowed fairly well until about two-thirds of the way through the third paragraph. Now suddenly we go retrograde, as you mention material that's already been covered, albeit not in the guise of a discussion of stages. You'll have to do something about this.

Answer 3

Next para.

Answer 4

Next couple of paras.

Answer 5

Next couple.

Answer 6

And here's the last of it. Let me know if anything is unclear, or if you have any other questions.

Answer 7

Hey RG, I went back through my essay and made all the changes you pointed out (except for the transitions, I have to work on those still). I'm not sure about the works cited page because my school says websites should look like the picture I just uploaded, but I"m not sure how to do that for wikipedia since a lot of people edit it. What should I do?

Answer 8

Are there authors' names listed with wikipedia articles? I'm thinking not. In that case you'd treat it just as you would a web page without an author. I believe that means just leaving off the author's name and listing all the other info.

Answer 9

ohh ok, thanks!