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anonymous · Answer

Je Hye Lee (이지혜) is a Korean gorgeous girl. She likes all kind of music and she has been a fan of Big Bang for seven years. She has always looked up to her teacher for her appearance and to her mother as role model. Collecting figures is one of her hobbies that she finds it interesting. According to her, Paris is the dreamy city she wants to visit during the time of diploma course; in addition, she admires the United Kingdom architectures. She shares her interests with friends who make her laugh. As an evidence of her guilty pleasures, she likes Italian food and her favourite movie is Notebook. I do hope she has an unrivalled experience at Kings College.

anonymous · Answer

switch the order of the adjectives "gorgeous" and "Korean"
"the time of diploma course" needs to be replaced; "after graduation" perhaps?
"the United Kingdom architectures" should be "British architecture"
a couple more minor changes to "Americanize" it, but it seems to be headed to the old country, so wait for someone versed in the Queen's English and Idioms help you there
And you may want to standardize the verb tenses.

anonymous · Answer

I do really appreciate your help.