Question

Can someone carefully edit my paper?
Thank you so much

Answer 1

Can anyone please just proofread my paper at least?
that would be very appreciated.
Thank you

Answer 2

Okay. That was long but amusing. So, I made a few corrections or what I thought would be better. By the way, if this is for a grade, it might be better to add more descriptive words. To be truthful, after reading the whole thing, I was still not sure what type of essay this was (persuasive, informative, etc.) If it is a fun write type, you might want to add a bit more feeling to it. No offense meant. Many writers are not able to "add feelings to their essays".

Answer 3

Made a few changes.