Question

I need some help with a thesis statement for a research paper about amusement park accidents. I'm looking at whether park and guest negligence cause more accidents than mechanical failure. I can't figure out a good way to phrase it.

Answer 1

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Answer 2

Fatal amusement park accidents are caused primarily by guest misuse and park negligence rather than mechanical failure.

I changed it a bit to be more specific, but I think you may have to revise once you figure out exactly what you want to address.

Answer 3

THANK YOU!!!!

Answer 4

Though records state that mechanical failure is the cause of accidents in amusement parks, customer negligence should still be considered as a reason for the increased number in park equipment malfunction records.

Reasons why this statement would work:
1. It states the argument--whether the accidents are caused by customer negligence or park maintenance
2. It presents the two sides.
3. It is debatable.