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In a good paragraph, show what you know about sentence fluency, tell which sample you ranked the highest and explain what qualities you saw in it.

Answer 1

Sample 1:

My Passion

I am passionate about my dancing. I have studied ballet since I was six years old, and I continue to love this pursuit. Although it is grueling work to prepare the body and the mind for a performance, I experience a delicious euphoria when I am on stage. When exhausted after a day's rigorous practice, I often wonder whether the end result is worth the physical discipline, self-denial and mental focus. Then, I imagine myself on stage again, at the height of fitness and alertness, ready for that opening curtain. This is when I know that, yes, it is all worth it!

Sample 2:

My Passion

I love to dance. I love the stage and the lights. I love the audience and the excitement of the performance. I don't always love the preparation it takes to get me onto that stage. The physical work is grueling. The mental discipline is hard. I can't always eat everything other teens eat. I sometimes wonder if it's all worth it. When I'm ready to perform, though, I guess it is.

Sample 3:

My Passion

Dance is my life. It is my heart and soul. I am passionate about dance. On stage, I feel groundless, as if I have no limits, no earthly weight. The spirit of freedom which sinks into my every cell sets my body free. When I dance, everything is possible! When I dance, there is magic and light! When I dance, the euphoria of the moment erases the memory of all the painful physical conditioning and self-denial. To dance, for me, is to live!