Would someone please read the beginning of my short story and tell me what they think of it please. If you notice anything odd call me out on it, but all i really want is your thought on whether it is good or not and what you like about it/ dislike about it.

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anonymous · Answer

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roku · Answer

I REALLY LIKED IT BUT WATS UP WITH THE SUDDEN CHANGE IN EVENTS... THIS IS NOVEL OR SHORT STORY. WHAT ABOUT THE GUY SHE LIKED?? AND WHY DOES HER DAD TREAT HER LIKE A PRINCESS HOW OLD IS SHE ANYWAY

anonymous · Answer

That sudden change in event would be chapter one. Before that was only the introduction. It could be either a short story or a novel. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

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roku · Answer

:) well finnish it ok i wanna read it