Question

Finding Hope

That little gleam, I see it,
Deep within my heart finally!
A drop from the sun, it shines,
It'll caress me with its light,
And end all misery finally!
I raised my hand towards it,
To feel it and bask within,
But it hurt, oh, it burned,
It's not the ray I seek,
but a fire of my pain,
flames burning my every beat,
Soon, it'll spread far and wide,
My heart will be nothing but ashes.

Comments?

Answer 1

Speechless... superb.. Hats off... :D

Answer 2

Needs lot of improvement though...

Answer 3

nice poem...

Answer 4

its awesome..fantastic !! :)

Answer 5

@physicsme ?

Answer 6

yes

Answer 7

done.

Answer 8

:)

Answer 9

(because my limited vocabulary cannot find words to praise you enough)

Answer 10

(good! because I have no words of how to thank you so many time :) )