Question

please comment on my poems...feel free to suggest corrections...

Answer 1

"Somewhere in the heaven where Gods used to meet,
From there came my angel, so cute so sweet.
She looked just awesome, ‘copy of Merry’
And I was gasping by that very.

She cackled, she laughed and through the sky,
drizzling her divinity, and charming sigh.
And when she suddenly ticked the sun,
Sun laughed in hay. They had rhymes and fun.

She wiped few stars and tapped moon face,
She played with them all; like run-chase
Now baby was tired and it was now night,
She slept on clouds, squeezing them tight.”

And when she was sleeping, she was so cute,
The Gods played violin, some played flute.
All were dancing surrounding the charm
The baby was in dreams, feeling warm.

Now it was dawn, gone was the night,
Sun swept baby’s cute face with light
She opened her eyes, sleeping so long
Someone was waiting to take her along.

Mother earth was pleased by the angel’s cute acts
She made her to reach earth, carrying in her lap.
They landed in my heart, heart’s mid place.
I am now dumb by seeing this face.

I got that angel, what luck I pose,
Whose love is that baby… gentle like Rose.
No time for sorry, Now, I’m always fine,
Because, she is with me, well…she is mine.”