Question

I need crits and suggestions<3

There is no home to return to.
The last light fades away.
All is lost, the Black sun rises,
As Darkness shrouds your way.

All good in the world has perished,
New eras, no longer ours.
The days of man have ended,
Replaced with lifeless hours.

Moments of death sear all memories

Pain is no foreign concept

And death lurks in every shadow

The smoke of burning and pure hate chokes the trees

Losses of nature that signal destruction"


Without you Frodo Baggins, this will be our new home.

Answer 1

I didn't mean to close this really. I only need the top part actually corrected and fixed.

Answer 2

It is a Lord of the Ring reference so if you do like LOTR let me know!

Answer 3

Man, this is nice. Good job shotgungirl, seeing there is a guy on your picture.... ok awkward

Answer 4

Oh that's Frodo Baggins. He's the one the poem is about<3

Answer 5

oh, that's cool. Nice description on the setting of the poem

Answer 6

Thank you,e That's really nice of you.

Answer 7

np