Can someone check my introduction paragraph. Everywhere I go I always tell myself this question "Am I ready to be a senior next year". Sometimes I feel I am not ready to be senior because I feel I have not made much improvement in my junior year. I have gain new skills and made some improvement in my junior year but I think I have not still show enough improvement to call myself a senior. I know I can become a well prepare senior if I start making some adjustment. If I start to show more growth than ever I believe I will be ready to become a senior.

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Can someone check my introduction paragraph.   Everywhere I go I always tell myself this question "Am I ready to be a senior next year". Sometimes I feel I am not ready to be senior because I feel I have not made much improvement in my junior year. I have gain new skills and made some improvement in my junior year but I think I have not still show enough improvement to call myself a senior. I know I can become a well prepare senior if I start making some adjustment. If I start to show more growth than ever I believe I will be ready to become a senior.

anonymous · Answer

It's a little wordy.  I shortened it.
What is your thesis?
You need three key points.

"I always ask myself if I am ready to be a senior next year.  Although I have gained a few new skills, I sometimes feel that I'm not quite ready to forge ahead.  However, if I make adjustments now, I know I will be prepared when the time comes."

~~~  This is where you list THREE things you will do to prepare yourself for your senior year.  these are your key points.  This is what you will be discussing throughout your paper.  These things are very important.