Can anyone take a look at my expository essay and help me edit my essay please?

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anonymous · Answer

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Working on this..

anonymous · Answer

ok.

day_2010 · Answer

Hi I sent you a message on the closed question for this paper. :)

day_2010 · Answer

Here you go:

day_2010 · Answer

Change anything if you like.

anonymous · Answer

I edited your paper, for you.  If you have any questions, just ask.

anonymous · Answer

Hey ujuge123, I see you have 2 helpers that edited your paper for you. If you still need my help let me know. Btw, how did you do on the previous papers I helped you with?

anonymous · Answer

Thank you Peeps and Day 2010. It was helpful.

anonymous · Answer

Hello, mjzolt, yes it will be helpful If you can help me edit my paper. I am not sure my grade for the previous paper because the teacher did not mark yet.