Question

please help me to fix my theesis statement here it is,
In fact I believe the media such as television, movies and music responsible for teen’s violence because, the media such as violent television shapes teens violent behaviour, movies on the other hand responsible for teens changes of emotions and, finally, the destructive themes in music teach teens bad behaviours.


My teacher said this is not a thesis statement

Answer 1

@uri

Answer 2

What sort of thesis statement should it be: analytical, expository, or argumentative?

Answer 3

You should state your thesis as though it is a fact. Never say "I believe."
I see where you are going with this, and I think this might work:
"A teenagers behavior is affected by the television programs and movies he watches, and the type of music he listens to."

Answer 4

Question: what type of teens are violent and who are they violent towards and effect? What do you believe triggers the violent behavior? (refer to the different types of media), what can help prevent teen violence and can the media reverse it some how? What specifically causes teens to act out in violence learned or influenced by media? These are some questions to help you start and form a thesis. These can also help you form points and write your body paragraph. Hope it truly helps! :)