can someone please check my introduction. "My name is Joe Espinoza and I was born in Mexico. I came to the U.S when I was two years old. The reason why my family came to the U.S is because they want me to have better opportunities than I had in mexico. When I was growing up I realize that many undocumented didn't have the same opportunities like those who have papers. I always see many undocumented try to have their voice to be heard by marching in the streets.

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anonymous · Answer

Mexico *  ........... take out the "to be heard" to just "be heard"  .  Also the "when i was growing up" change to "As i grew up"

anonymous · Answer

also say .. undocumented people ... because i didnt know what u were talking about . needs that detail