Whats wrong with this?
Square Box Company
56789 South Bend Circle
King, Illinois 55544

Hello Mr. or Ms. Smith,

1 Would you consider this donation to our school? We would love to talk with you and share our plans for the floats if that would interest you. Please let me know if you are willing and able to help us in this way. Thank you for supporting your local schools.

2 I am writing to you today to ask for a donation to our school. I go to school at King High School just down the road from your box factory. My name is Sara

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Whats wrong with this?
Square Box Company
56789 South Bend Circle
King, Illinois 55544

Hello Mr. or Ms. Smith,

1 Would you consider this donation to our school? We would love to talk with you and share our plans for the floats if that would interest you. Please let me know if you are willing and able to help us in this way. Thank you for supporting your local schools.

2 I am writing to you today to ask for a donation to our school. I go to school at King High School just down the road from your box factory. My name is Sara