Hi I Wrote An Essay and Turned It In to my teacher and He Gave Me This Feed Back. "Revisit this and touch it up. Where's a proper title? You bring up a lot of great stats but generalize them all. Striking increase in divorce rate... what's the rate? Why is it striking? There are tons of examples of this through the essay. Give more detail."

Can Someone Explain To Me What He Means and Maybe Check Over My Essay? If I Post It.

Yes I Know this is math but i need help bad

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Hi I Wrote An Essay and Turned It In to my teacher and He Gave Me This Feed Back. "Revisit this and touch it up. Where's a proper title? You bring up a lot of great stats but generalize them all. Striking increase in divorce rate... what's the rate? Why is it striking? There are tons of examples of this through the essay. Give more detail." 

Can Someone Explain To Me What He Means and Maybe Check Over My Essay? If I Post It.

Yes I Know this is math but i need help bad

kainui · Answer

I think he wants to see the actual numbers to support your claims, not just your opinions of the data so he can see for himself that, "Ahhh, this is striking!"