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Question: If you knew that the world was going to come to an end in June 2013, how would you live your remaining months?

Answer 1

Knowing the world would be coming to an end would be a big surprise. First, I would choose to be very cautious. I would then choose to have as much fun as possible. Finally, I would choose to just live like I do at this moment in time. However, all of this time would be with my family.
Without delay, I would want to get my hands on a Heckler & Koch VP70. Yes, a firearm is necessary especially when I know people will start going haywire. People do dumb things now, so if the world was going to end would they really care what they did? I'm pretty sure people would go to the extreme to do whatever they felt like doing. So a firearm would be as protection from the deranged people. Can't be to meticulous in a world where people kill others for sneakers. I mean how desperate can one be?
Then, I would have so much fun. I would want to go skydiving especially since I am skittish of heights. What would be a better time to override a fear, the world is ending right? I'd want to go to an amusement park and get the wristband where it allows you to cut the line. Then I'd go through every single ride and the best ones twice. As a matter of fact, I'd go to all the closest amusement parks and have the time of my life. Above all I'd want to play tennis with someone in my family. Even though I am not the best in the sport I can do okay for an amateur. Then again, I would like to race go karts on a huge track.
Finally, I would choose to live my life. Basically not having to worry about school would be fine enough. I would get on my PlayStation 3 and play my games. My family could have a tournament in Wheel of Fortune and Tennis. The last moments would just be better having fun. Who wants to sit around being depressed?
To summarize, if the world were going to end I would just do what I want. What's the worst that can happen? I believe people should just have fun and enjoy the time with their family. However, upon doing this people should act decorous. Then in the last month just live it one day at a time.

Answer 2

The top should be indented I can see that.

Answer 3

This was revised and I had flipped the paragraphs about firearms. I do not want to use transition words like First, Second, Last.

Answer 4

That's really good. you should add some commas in where you pause. Read it out loud, commas can change the meaning. For instance is the world ending right (like once it gets too far to the right it will end) or are you trying to affirm your previous idea. You did much better without the transitions, keep revising and refining and read it outloud to a friend.