Question

is this good

Answer 1

The political speech i picked is by "Anonymous". It is called "Message to the American People!"It is about the U.S senate trying to pass a bill (112th congress 2011-2012 S.1867) that effectively against the bill of rights. The national defense authorization act will make the USA like China a dictatorship.I don't know about you but i love my freedom it is nice having the "Bill Of Rights" and if that "the national defense authorization act"would of got passed it would give the government the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens and the ability to legally assassinate with impunity

Answer 2

something feels wrong here "It is about the U.S senate trying to pass a bill (112th congress 2011-2012 S.1867) that effectively against the bill of rights. "

maybe you're missing a linking verb?

Answer 3

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Answer 4

"that effectively against the bill of rights"

Answer 5

it is on this http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HrXyLrTRXso&feature=related

Answer 6

what do you mean it's there? this whole paragraph you wrote is there?

Answer 7

yes but i got to typ a page

Answer 8

...what im commenting on is the grammar...not the context....

Answer 9

o

Answer 10

"that effectively against the bill of rights" this should be "that is effectively against the bill of rights"

Answer 11

^that's what i meant by missing a linking verb

Answer 12

o thank you

Answer 13

"The national defense authorization act will make the USA like China a dictatorship"

i think this will sound better if it was "The national defense authorization act will make the USA become a dictatorship, like China."

Answer 14

yes it dose lol

Answer 15

here comes the pikahuna..

"I don't know about you but i love my freedom it is nice having the "Bill Of Rights" and if that "the national defense authorization act"would of got passed it would give the government the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens and the ability to legally assassinate with impunity"

there are some punctuation errors (and some grammar errors too)

I don't know about you, but i love my freedom; it is nice having the "Bill Of Rights", and if that "National Defense Authorization Act"would get passed, it would give the government the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens, and the ability to legally assassinate with impunity.

im still a little bit unsure of "...the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens..." i feel like something's wrong but i don't know where and how to correct it

Answer 16

maybe it's best to use a period in "I don't know about you, but i love my freedom." rather than a semicolon..yeah.. put a period, not the semicolon

Answer 17

yes i see that did sond alot better

Answer 18

well those were all i can find

Answer 19

thank you so much :)

Answer 20

The political speech i picked is by "Anonymous". It is called "Message to the American People!"It is about the U.S senate trying to pass a bill (112th congress 2011-2012 S.1867) that is effectively against the bill of rights. The national defense authorization act will make the USA become a dictatorship like China.I don't know about you, but i love my freedom; it is nice having the "Bill Of Rights", and if that "National Defense Authorization Act"would get passed, it would give the government the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens, and the ability to legally assassinate with impunity.

Answer 21

welcome

Answer 22

The political speech i picked is by "Anonymous". It is called "Message to the American People!"It is about the U.S senate trying to pass a bill (112th congress 2011-2012 S.1867) that is effectively against the bill of rights. The national defense authorization act will make the USA become a dictatorship like China.I don't know about you, but i love my freedom; it is nice having the "Bill Of Rights", and if that "National Defense Authorization Act"would get passed, it would give the government the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens, and the ability to legally assassinate with impunity.

Answer 23

hmm you missed the other punctuation marks i wrote....let me rewrite that...

The political speech I picked is by "Anonymous". It is called, "Message to the American People!" It is about the U.S senate's trying to pass a bill (112th congress 2011-2012 S.1867) that is effectively against the bill of rights. The national defense authorization act will make the USA become a dictatorship, like China.I don't know about you, but i love my freedom. It is nice having the "Bill Of Rights", and if that "National Defense Authorization Act"would get passed, it would give the government the power to detention, arrest and interrogating US citizens, and the ability to legally assassinate with impunity.

Answer 24

o this ;

Answer 25

yes. i said turn it into a period hehe

Answer 26

o

Answer 27

thank you now i will write more

Answer 28

welcome