Question

Can someone help with APA style, thanks!
1.Toilet paper was first used in the 1300’s.
2.The monkeys couldn’t find the fruit.
3.The Ohio Board of Nursing (OBN) provides legal oversight for the practice of nursing in the state of Ohio.
4.Jamie could not here the instructions for the final exam.
5.It’s fur was very tangled, and made grooming difficult.
6.The Nurse Practioner made several home visits.
7.49 percent of the students received the highest grade.
8.I would like to gain more knowledge on the number of children who are experiencing depression. In order to do this I would pass out 40 surveys to high school children. After receiving the results from the surveys I would then analysis the surveys and attempt to understand the extent of the problem.
9.Boys ate every bit of the eggs, bacon, and grits that were in the refrigerator.
10.Cats are not the only mammals that experience hair balls. A human can form a hair ball (known as a trichobezoar), and they can cause abdominal obstruction.

Answer 1

1. you should use 1300s instead of 1300's <--british people write that way
2. use could not instead of couldn't <--in formal writing, you should refrain from using contraction (especially if you want your paper to look longer)
3. I think you're supposed to put more details into Ohio (something like Ohio, United States of America maybe?)
4. Here is a pronoun of place. The right one should be hear, which means to detect vibrations of sound through the ears
5. It's is a contraction of "it is". The right word is its, which is the possessive form
6. you shouldn't capitalize Nurse Practitioner. It's something like "teacher"/
7. "grade" should be plural (as in grades) because the students don't share the "grade"
8. After receiving the results, <--put a comma (because it is a break)
9. Don't put comma before and. You only put commas before conjunctions if they're linking two independent clauses.
10. nothing seems wrong for me

Answer 2

does that help @shepherd ?

Answer 3

Thanks!!

Answer 4

wel;come