Question

If anyone could look at my song-in progress, that'd be great:

I just can’t hurt you
But I don’t know what to do

I can’t say the words
What would I do afterwards?

But then you lost trust
And I had to adjust

You left in a fit of rage
As if placing me in a cage

I know I should leave behind
All these thoughts in my mind

And these feelings in my heart
But I don’t know how to start…

But I’m finding it impossible
I just am not able

To forget

Answer 1

Didn't involve enough spaghetti.

Answer 2

let's hear how it sounds then we can tell you what to fix

Answer 3

Suggestion:
"I know I should leave behind
All \(\it{this\ spaghetti}\) in my mind"

Answer 4

?? I can't fully figure out the melody and I need to work on my voice before I sing it. Plus I have a cold now.

Answer 5

i liked it(:

Answer 6

Please, kymber...

Answer 7

Another suggestion:
"You left in a fit of rage
As if placing me in a cage \(\it{filled\ with\ spaghetti}\)"

Answer 8

Thanks, Bri. This is about something that just happened, like a bit ago in my life, so... it's not just by someone who knows nothing about the experiences in the song...

Answer 9

Kymber, if you don't have a real suggestion that makes sense, please get out of my question!!!

Answer 10

These are nice lyrics, but if you added some spaghetti, it would be perfect :)

Answer 11

:| My suggestions make perfect sense. No need to be rude.

Answer 12

PLEASE!!!

Answer 13

spaghetti does sound good right now

Answer 14

I'm sorry. I didn't mean it that way. I just meant it doesn't go with the meter of the song...

Answer 15

true dat

Answer 16

PLEASE! NO MORE SPAGHETTI TALK!!!

Answer 17

You could just ignore my suggestions, then :|

Oh and, did you know there's a music group? You could post this song there, too.
http://openstudy.com/study#/groups/Music

Answer 18

Oh? Thanks for THAT suggestion!

Answer 19

\(\Huge\ddot\smile\)

Answer 20

How did you do that?

Answer 21

It's \(\LaTeX\).

Answer 22

It's \ddot\smile

Answer 23

Ok...

Answer 24

I agree with Kymber.