Question

If anyone could look at my song-in progress, that'd be great:

I just can’t hurt you
But I don’t know what to do

I can’t say the words
What would I do afterwards?

But then you lost trust
And I had to adjust

You left in a fit of rage
As if placing me in a cage

I know I should leave behind
All these thoughts in my mind

And these feelings in my heart
But I don’t know how to start…


But I’m finding it impossible
Yeah, I'm finding it impossible

I just am not able
I'm sadly unable
To forget

Answer 1

You can edit questions, you know. :P

Answer 2

Oh....

Answer 3

\(\Huge\ddot\smile\)

Answer 4

Just remember, a cold greatly changes the quality of my voice, I need to work on my voice, and I have a bad quality microphone. This is just to give people who look at this an idea...

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ddot/smile

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ddotsmile

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d dot smile

Answer 8

You need to enclose it in \(

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and \)

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\(ddot/smile\)

Answer 11

i like it it would sound cool with a piano instrumental behind it

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It's \ddot\smile

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\(\ddot\smile\)

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GOT IT!

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\(\Huge\ddot\smile\) \(\Huge\mathsf{Yay!}\)

Answer 16

I play piano, @bngaure !

Answer 17

But my voice isn't too good, even under normal circumstances. I also play guitar.

Which do you think would sound better?

Answer 18

Did you listen to the mp3s, @bngaure

Answer 19

your voice sounds fine to mee with music behind it it will sound even better.

Answer 20

Thanks. You're not just saying that ?

Answer 21

I'm a very low alto though. Most people don;t like that at all for a girl... They only like sopranos...

Answer 22

no haha i actually prefer deeper voices. um take etta james for example her voice is even deeper then yours oh and adele shes not a soprano either.

Answer 23

Ok. Thanls. But you're not just saying mine is good as a complinment?

Answer 24

I can't type today...

Answer 25

that was a fail in my opinion. almost the whole song you are like aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

Answer 26

Ok. First of all, look at the comment. "Just remember, a cold greatly changes the quality of my voice, I need to work on my voice, and I have a bad quality microphone. This is just to give people who look at this an idea..."

Answer 27

Kymber, PLEASE don't agree with him!!!

Answer 28

ok ok well you indeed need to pass that cold, then you need a good beat, and after that you will have a great song!

PS : and a better mic

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I can't listen to it now, I'm at school :|

Answer 30

I don't have the MONEY for a better mic!!! And, yes, I KNOW my voice needs work.

Answer 31

Ok. Well, I'm just glad you didn't agree with him...

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@bngaure :

You're not just SAYING I'm good?

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Also, I just want to say that when you post things like this on the internet, expect negative feedback.

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true dat

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no im not just saying that i only lie if it will benefit me, i think that with an instrumental behind it your gonna have yourself a good song

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I know, but not totally neg, but just say ONE thing you loked, or say a way to fix it along with the negatives...

Answer 37

Thanks. I just went through a lot, so I wrote this to help, and to make a song others will like.

Answer 38

@kymber is right, not everyone is gonna give positive feedback.

My opinion is that your voice IS a bit hard to hear. However the song lyrics are really good, and maybe with some backround music or a beat...you never know ^_^

Answer 39

get a catchy beat or tune.... you NEED it. but honestly how can you expect your song to be great with a mic like that. you wanna sound crystal clear.

Answer 40

Well, KnitWit, he did say a way to fix it and you weren't very appreciative.

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Thanks! I wasn't expecting fully positive, just a bit of gold with the rocks, so to speak.

@kymber But not in the same comment. That's what I hoped for, constructive crit, but in the same thing, a way to fix it, or a part that they liked...

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i like.....................the words ^_^

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Thanks!

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But not my voice... I'm trying...

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The words are okay.. but could use some spaghetti.
"I just can’t hurt you
But I don’t know what to do \(\it{with\ all\ this\ spaghetti\ flowing\ out\ of\ my\ pockets}\)."

Answer 46

You said that similarly in the other question...

Answer 47

i honestly hope you clear up your voice, add a good beat, and make a bajillion dollars on a great new song :)

Answer 48

"I just am not able
I'm sadly unable
To \(\it{staunch\ the\ flow\ of\ spaghetti\ from\ my\ pockets}\)."

Answer 49

Thanks! I know, my voice needs work, but I'm trying, my dad's helping, and I'm pianoing... oh wait, that ing doesn't work...

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I don'r have the money for a new mic, and this is just a trial thing...

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to try out the song, etc...

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i enjoyed the lyrics of your song. keep working on your voice(:

Answer 53

Thanks! You saw the wmas?

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Oh wait, you didn't.

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I've got to go. Be back on Monday.

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\[\Huge\ddot\smile \]

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i like it a lot! great job!

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it's really good! you're very talented x

Answer 59

Great Job! Cingratulations! Do you mind if I refer you to a talent agency my friend works for?
I think you have some serious talent!

Test Taking Lifesaver

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Test Taking Lifesaver there's a reason your friend works for the talent agency and not you

Answer 61

Dear kjhgfd,
Your Right! I work for google! Im better off! Thanks for that!

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@TestTakingLifesaver haha good one

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Thanks!

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its f'in dope kid ;D beautiful keep adit