Question

i need help re-writing my essay and proof reading. BIG TIME! anyone willing to help me??!?

Answer 1

What is your report about?

Answer 2

I can proof read if you haz it

Answer 3

its about success. And so like my teacher gave me 25 vocab words to put in the essay and yesterday someone edited it for me and they said some of my words are defined in context so i have to rewrite some and i need help. Also grammar with comma's and stuff.

Answer 4

well sure upload it here click attatch file below and we will take a look at it.

Answer 5

ok

Answer 6

can u see it?

Answer 7

yes maam

Answer 8

ok so i did notice there were random numbers and some words were bolded or underlined... Is it supposed to be that way?

Answer 9

oh yah ignore the numbers and the underlined words are the vocab words I'm supposed to put in but some of them r used incorrectly so i have to rewrite some of the sentences.

Answer 10

Lol honors english.. aren't you supposed to know your things =P

Answer 11

At least you're not in my school... Freaking college classes practically.. in high school.

Answer 12

lol this teacher is hella hard.

Answer 13

Lol trust me, you do not know hard yet.

Answer 14

lol oh god I'm scared.

Answer 15

this is actually a pretty easy project

Answer 16

Eh still proofreading and making some changes

Answer 17

i will show it to you when i am finished and you can format it

Answer 18

ok

Answer 19

that will help a lot guys

Answer 20

Do not worry. it will be beautiful.

Answer 21

You will cry tears of joy.

Answer 22

hahaha! :) Your awesome

Answer 23

It'll take a while but so does success lol...

Answer 24

agree

Answer 25

haha

Answer 26

i am 2/3 way done to success :)

Answer 27

hahah

Answer 28

wait a second!!!!!!!!! monica!!! you copied my numbers!!!!

Answer 29

wait what? lol i don't get it haha

Answer 30

countonme123
monica123

Answer 31

OH AHAHHAHAHA. OMG I just noticed hahaha

Answer 32

what do you mean by this ...

Everything eventually does happen for a reason. If someone was to get fired from a job, there's another better job out there.

Answer 33

I mean like if something happened to someone like something bad. Theres something better coming to your life.

Answer 34

how can you say that?

Answer 35

what do you mean?

Answer 36

Are you a Christian?

Answer 37

yah.

Answer 38

cool! so am I

Answer 39

:) awesome

Answer 40

Ditto(the pokemon)

Answer 41

@countonme123 We can post our thingies and then she can decide whose is better ;P

Answer 42

Even though mine might take longer..

Answer 43

lol

Answer 44

ok lol I am on the last paragraph now. I am not sure how many pages this report is supposed to be but mine is gonna turn out to be 3 pages.

Answer 45

yah its 3 pages

Answer 46

ok good

Answer 47

Lol i totally reformatted it to single spacing so its like 1 and a half

Answer 48

promise no one will get upset if i pick someone over the other.

Answer 49

oh its fine

Answer 50

I will not get upset.. (i will just cry myself to sleep seeing as my job was poor)

Answer 51

:( noo dont cry

Answer 52

ill give u a cookie

Answer 53

lol i wont cry or get mad. i like my revision :) it has a nicer sound to the ears :)

Answer 54

lol i think you used voluptuous wrong.. because it kind of implies "sensual pleasures"

Answer 55

no clue how to put something "sensually pleasurable" in there

Answer 56

my teacher wants to use voluptuous as meaning magnificent

Answer 57

OH ok

Answer 58

lol

Answer 59

*Note:
I did not change the bolded/underlined words.

Answer 60

Well i thought that was the point.. because they were bolded and underlined.

Answer 61

monica123 said...
"oh yah ignore the numbers and the underlined words are the vocab words I'm supposed to put in but some of them r used incorrectly so i have to rewrite some of the sentences. "

Answer 62

its fine if you changed the part of speech and stuff.. idc. oh btw in the first paragraph emphasize was supposed to be emphatic

Answer 63

oh my sentence kinda sounded weird i meant ignore the numbers but you cld change the vocab words cuz i used them incorrectly. the words r supposed to define in the context but not exactly put the definition of the word.... so i did it wrong in some words.

Answer 64

im done

Answer 65

alright! let me see it!

Answer 66

wait! he might still my ideas!

Answer 67

hahaha ummm then u wanna email it to me?

Answer 68

i guess

Answer 69

ok email it to monicaazmi.ma@gmail.com

Answer 70

sent

Answer 71

ok im gonna read it

Answer 72

lol i messed up in the first paragraph *fail!

Answer 73

lol my ideas cannot be stolened

Answer 74

and i wouldnt steal any from you anyhow

Answer 75

^_- ok?

Answer 76

lol im trying to finish the last paragraph

Answer 77

can't wait to see it :)

Answer 78

thank you countonme123 ! that helped a lot !

Answer 79

your welcome

Answer 80

Okies i am sending mine now

Answer 81

alright

Answer 82

Hopefully.. it can be read.. lol

Answer 83

post yours here @Freyes If I like it better than mine I will give you a medal.

Answer 84

xD

Answer 85

wow

Answer 86

I tried to keep it as close to the original as possible.. thats about it

Answer 87

same here

Answer 88

here is mine

Answer 89

whoa! you changed it a lot!

Answer 90

Well some of the tenses and grammar were off

Answer 91

It means the same thing ;P

Answer 92

ok

Answer 93

Thank you Freyes this also helped a lot!

Answer 94

I will now pick the "better" one