How does my poem look? :)

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charlotte123 · Answer

The Cinnamon Challenge
The bottle landed on me
Time to do this dare
Everything will be alright I thought
I put a tablespoon of cinnamon in my mouth without a care
Its spicy 
Its gooey 
Its stickey
Yet chewy 
It sneaked behind my throat and I began to cough
Then some how it climbed into my nose and boy did it burn
My eyes began to water and tears began to drop out
I quickly swallowed it all up and then my stomach started to turn
My friends began to congratulate me
And then I started smile 
But I didn't smile because I won the challenge
But because I was glad that the side effects wore off after a while
Never will I do this challenge again 
In my whole entire life
Don’t be like me and think once before doing something like this 
Be smart and think twice

anonymous · Answer

be more emotional

charlotte123 · Answer

thats as emotional as I can be O_O

anonymous · Answer

i like it its ten times better then i can do lol

charlotte123 · Answer

aww thanks marie ^O^

konradzuse · Answer

In my opinion it's good but some lines could be shorter for instance  "I put a tablespoon of cinnamon in my mouth without a care"