Question

i wrote a song , anyone wanna help me make it better?

Answer 1

Sure!

Answer 2

Verse 1:
Words on a paper, written in blood, the last thing he gave to the world, he wrote with pain, thoughts on his mind, to all who hate him, this is what he says
Chorus: Im so sorry, I cant believe, Why you hate me But I see reason, so I’ll end my life, I know you wont miss me, But tell my mother I love her ,Tell my father I’ll miss him, Tell my brother im sorry, Tell my sister I did the best I can, Im so sorry im not perfect, im so sorry you cant see how great I am
Verse2:
Funeral arrangements are made,Depression overcomes his home,A call is made to the school, A moment of silence,His haters begin to realize, Their torture cost his life,Tears run down faces, and teachers wish they had done more,The principle reads his letter, the dying boy wrote,
(chorus)
Verse 3:
The girl he loved runs crying from the room, Her teacher asks, was she close to him,She looks up and says, no,I was so mean to him, and he loved me still,I wish I told him he means the world to me,One by one the students come into the hall,Each with tears in their eyes,They pray for forgiveness,They all apologies to late,If only they could rewind, maybe they could stop it.
Verse 4:
Words on a paper,Written in blood,The last thing he gave to the world,He wrote with pain,Thoughts on his mind,To all those who hate him,This is what he says,
(chorus)

Answer 3

Wow that was deep!

Answer 4

thanks

Answer 5

This sound cold the way it is already! You dont need to change anything about it! i like it

Answer 6

well thanks