Your opinion on my lyrics?

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anonymous · Answer

Dying words

The passing goes on as my soul flies on,
still I try to keep going strong,
the tears tear through as I look at you,
you smile back and the pain that you lack
....it kills me

I can't stand this
(The water is rising)
Reprimand this
(Commense the lying)
Let it go let it go
(I'm trying)
tally ho tally ho
(I'm dying)

The cancer spreads and the flesh is dead
all the walls you can see are red
the wound is open and gushing now
as the people start to take a bow
...it's killing me

(I'm still waiting and you're still hating)

I can't stand this
(The water is rising)
Reprimand this
(Commense the lying)
Let it go let it go
(I'm trying)
tally ho tally ho
(I'm dying)

How could you do this to me?
The smiling and the "keep on moving"
My eyes are red and your lies are dead
dying I say you will find a way

I can't stand this
(The water is rising)
Reprimand this
(Commense the lying)
Let it go let it go
(I'm trying)
tally ho tally ho
(I'm dying)

I'm dying....

anonymous · Answer

Oh by the way this is under copyright

anonymous · Answer

its good i could probably sing it lol

anonymous · Answer

That'd be flippin AWESOME!!! See that would be a collab!

anonymous · Answer

hahhah ok then ill see what i can do i need background music idk how to do that lol unless i play somthing lol but i can sing it

anonymous · Answer

Well I can't do back ground music so yeah...I got a basic tune i'd like but just sing it and we'll see I guess!

anonymous · Answer

Its good and yeah Gaby, you should sing it lol