I wrote this paper. my profesor is letting me rewrite the analogy. my analogy is the 3rd paragraph and i am comparing it to Mark Twain, "Two View of a River"

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anonymous · Answer

Hope you can understand my edits, it was kind of crammed.  I'm not sure I understood your assignment but the Two views of a river starts with ignorance and just enjoyment of natures beauties.  It is then supposed to progress as he see's things matter of fact and comes out of his ignorance.  Try and be more descriptive. for example don't say "There are so many things you can do in the city". What can you do in the city, give the reader the picture as i put in your paper.

venomblast · Answer

oh my god thank you. i am a bad essay writer. i always get a B on my English assignment.

venomblast · Answer

on the 3rd paragraph, i need to write an analogy like mark twain did. (mark twain made his Anology about a doctor to the Mississippi river.)