Question

proof read my childrens story plz

Answer 1

I read it.. Its good.. Why do they talk?? Do they find their way back home?? Why did pig have polka dots?? lol

Answer 2

here is the rest of the story

Answer 3

lol cool

Answer 4

Well, I think I'll have to disagree with Alyx just a little. I'm assuming that this is going to be a picture book, right?

Answer 5

yea it is

Answer 6

Then you don't need to say nearly so many words. "She went over to where they were going to eat," is entirely unecessary. Try to simplify the text a little. Other than that, it's a good silly story. :)

Answer 7

kk ill fiix it thx

Answer 8

Disagree with me fine.. I liked it! It was funny in a way

Answer 9

thank you

Answer 10

It's a cute story :)

Answer 11

thank you i rewrote the ending tho