Question

Can someone help me read over my paragraph and see if i used semi-colons and comma's correctly. And like any grammar mistakes. Thank you.

Answer 1

Being cruel can happen in a lot of places, even on the Internet. I have a good camaraderie with a girl named Katie (she's one of the people in my life that I can trust);she's been through a lot over the years. She uses Twitter to talk to supporters who have been praying for her over the years from recovering from a boating accident. She shares her heart warming anecdote that changed many people's perspectives about life and believing in miracles. Getting strong support from people; however, Katie gains haters who are envious of her because she knows a talented musician. At that time, she started receiving comments with invective language and death threats. They criticize her and try to sabotage her innocent appearance by posting inappropriate photo shopped pictures that are not even veritable or believable. Twitter users create other accounts to send her hate; therefore she cannot block the comments or the users. Them posting all those brutal comments are just for their own amusement. I think of it like these haters are just like dolphins that kill members
of another species for giggles and grins. I don't understand how it makes a person
feel good, or what they are accomplishing in their lives. These people most likely have been mistreated in their lives or always feeling unhappy with themselves. It causes them to take their anger and put it towards someone else. Katie never gave them a reason to hate her, that shows how cruel people can be by creating their own little drama of pure insecurity. Cold-hearted people have imprudent actions to the point where they do not know what they are actually doing to someone emotionally. To make the hate stop there was only one thing to do-rescind the account! She finally go rid of her Twitter and she's more happier this way. The haters are
dissipating from her life and she was able to keep her joy. A conflagration enters in her life by ruining her joy, but she's burning out the fire by killing the haters away.

Answer 2

Being cruel can happen in a lot of places, even on the Internet. I have a good camaraderie with a girl named Katie (she's one of the people in my life that I can trust). She's been through a lot over the years. She uses Twitter to talk to supporters who have been praying for her over the years from recovering from a boating accident. She shares her heart warming anecdote that changed many people's perspectives about life and believing in miracles. Getting strong support from people, however, Katie gains haters who are envious of her because she knows a talented musician. At that time, she started receiving comments with invective language and death threats. They criticized her and tried to sabotage her innocent appearance by posting inappropriate photoshopped pictures that are not even veritable or believable. Twitter users create other accounts to send her hate, therefore she cannot block the comments or the users. They posted all of those brutal comments just for their own amusement. I think of it like these haters are just like dolphins that kill members of another species for giggles and grins. I don't understand how it makes a person feel good, or what they are accomplishing in their lives by doing it. These people most likely have been mistreated in their lives or are always feeling unhappy with themselves. It causes them to take their anger and put it towards someone else. Katie never gave them a reason to hate her. That shows how cruel people can be by creating their own little drama of pure insecurity. Cold-hearted people have imprudent actions to the point where they do not know what they are actually doing to someone emotionally. To make the hate stop there was only one thing to do; delete the account! She finally got rid of her Twitter account and she's much happier this way. The haters are disappearing from her life and she was able to keep her joy. A conflagration enters her life by ruining her joy, but she's burning out the fire by making the haters disappear.

Answer 3

thank you so much !

Answer 4

You're welcome.