Question

new poem: they told me to write something about when im angry so this is how i am

~.~.~.~.~.~Hate & Hidden Emotions.~.~.~.~.~.~.~
When hate hits my mind
I cant control myself
i feel like a tiny devils controlling my insides
its like i put the bible on the shelf
and brought out a 9mm pistol
my conscience shuts down
my hate is bigger than bristol
this hate just wants to see you on the ground
my hate is uncontrollable
because love isnt provided
but doesnt mean its unstoppable
love is all i need for this hate to be divided
I got love in my heart but envy in my mind
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Answer 1

but the envy is for the ones who hurt me
i stay silent but my emotions are trapped inside
im just waiting for someone to listen to me
to listen to my small story and go throug the motions
for its just hate & hidden emotions
-Joanna Ramirez:)
tell me what u think this is the one i hate cuz it hurts

Answer 2

That name Joanna Ramirez sounds familiar

Answer 3

haha its mine

Answer 4

well my name is Joanna Novelo Ramirez haha but i just put Joanna Ramirez

Answer 5

~.~.~.~Jessica R. Novelo~.~.~.~.~
i remeber when she was born
it was 2002 she was a beauty
my heart was whole and not torn
she looked like me, what a cutie
i loved her no matter the trouble
she always cryed and got me busted
her smile is lovable
she played with my old toys all dusted
i get angry but i love her
she so cute and small
she just like a teddy bear
she stand on a chair and says shes tall
im glad she in my life
i no shell be respected by a mister
as long as in my body theres life
i just love my sister
-Joanna Ramirez

what do u think?

Answer 6

nice,i love the first 1 im goin to memorize it

Answer 7

lol..your startin to write like a pro, good job!

Answer 8

haha thank guys your very supportive i hope i can write more

Answer 9

@drummerboyswag ok bt member its mine lol serious

Answer 10

@Terrell thank i hope i can get and the best part is that im studing poetry next in english

Answer 11

Oh well thts good for;)..Did you study the romeo and Juliet poem already?

Answer 12

ard

Answer 13

yes it was kewl i went ahead of the class and read it all haha

Answer 14

haha

Answer 15

wow both poems are really good you've got a gift girl im horrible at writting poems lol

Answer 16

i thought that to but Terell helped me and i love it