Question

proofread my essay please

Answer 1

These two main ad talks about do not text while driving because you might hurt someone or hurt yourself. These two ads are describing because of a dumb mistakes someone might get hurt, and it’s your fought. “In fact, texting behind the wheel is so dangerous that it can cut a driver’s response time by 18% or the seconds it takes to miss a stop sign, run an intersection and broadside a family.” While texting and driving you will cause someone’s death and cause the family a heartbreak. The first ad in the top shows a cell phone leaking blood on the right side and the left side is a gun. In the top middle is the title of this ad is Russian roulette. In the bottom of the picture it states “A cell phone is a weapon – Whenever you drive a car and use one. It’s that simple. And that deadly. Last year, nearly 6,000 fatalities and over half of a million was injuries are caused by distracted driver’s. In fact, texting behind the wheel is so dangerous that it can cut a driver’s response time by 18% or the seconds it takes to miss a stop sign, run an intersection and broadside a family. The background of this ad is white. Below the statistic there is a quote “Whatever you have to say can wait. Unless it goodbye”. The company name is cone-net and auto week. This is ad is showing a gun on the left and a cell leaking blood on the right side. This picture is explaining that you are killing someone in cold blood. This ad is telling the target audience that you should not drive while texting. Below the picture “A cell phone is a weapon – Whenever you drive a car and use one. It’s that simple. And that deadly. The picture and the writing work together to get the appeal because it tells the audience that there are millions of cases of car accident that involves people whom text while driving. This ad is effective because the ad is that it wrong drives without paying attention on the road. This is a logical appeal because it tells the audience that you is careful while driving behind the wheel. The second ad shows blood on the floor and a broken phone with small spot of blood. The floor is white. In the top right hand corner is a quote “This person you are trying to reach is no longer available.” Next to the phone there is a big spot of blood. There is a shadow of a car with some blood on it. This ad is an emotional appeal because this ad shows that someone is going to get killed by a driver who's texting while driving The picture and the writing work together to get the appeal because it tells the audience that there are millions of cases of car accident that involves people who text while driving ad is effective because the ad is that it wrong drive without paying attention on the road. My opinion on this ad is that they both show that it’s a bad mistake to kill someone while driving and texting at the same time. This ad shows a good message because it’s telling us that life is short.
In conclusion driving while text is a bad choice because you might kill a person by mistake.

Answer 2

The first "ad" in the essay needs an "s" on the end of it.

Answer 3

"and it’s your fought. " Fault not fought

Answer 4

"It’s that simple. And that deadly." should be: It's that simple and that deadly.

Answer 5

In fact, texting behind the wheel is so dangerous that it can cut a driver’s response time by 18% or the seconds it takes to miss a stop sign, run an intersection and broadside a family.

You have two of these - take out one - you don't want to be redundant.

Answer 6

“Whatever you have to say can wait. Unless it goodbye”. You need to put an " 's " at the end of "it."

Answer 7

The company name is cone-net and auto week. Unless the company names are in lowercase letters you should always capitalize each word except words like "and", "of", and sometimes "the."

Answer 8

This is ad is showing a --- Take away the "is" after "this."

Answer 9

My opinion on this ad is that they both show ----- If there is more then one ad your are talking about you need to put an "s" on the end of "ad."

Answer 10

Overall this looks really really good. Only just a few adjustments and it will be even better! I hope that I helped you at least a little bit. :)