Question

anyone want to revise my story..

Answer 1

Go ahead, ill try

Answer 2

Sure :)

Answer 3

Send it to me via message or right here :) What grade? and am i allowed to take in and add or just grammar? like can i change vocab and sentence structure or just simple revising??

Answer 4

yup i need it via message cant post in here i send it via message to you.
the problem is i cannot publish it because of the grammar error and the reason is english my 2nd language. >>>this story is for website but i get the word Substandard: The quality of this Hub does not live up to HubPages' standards. It may be empty or unfinished, poorly formatted (including having a disallowed capsule in the first full width position), contain broken links or videos, low quality photos or videos, use all capital letters or contain grammar or spelling mistakes that interfere with the readability of the Hub. These factors diminish the value of this Hub to our community.

Answer 5

Yup you can add something, my goal is to publish it without violation

Answer 6

i can check and see if its good

Answer 7

send it to you via message

Answer 8

okay

Answer 9

dont post the story here

Answer 10

i like it, i would make the biggning a little more longer and i would also not say to go to open study, i would say to go onto helping sites, example openstudy and yahoo answers.

Answer 11

it makes it look like your trying to advertise.

Answer 12

yeah they send me a message about substandard check my 1st reply my grammar and given me last chance to publish it

Answer 13

i edit the other word my u = you
and i = I

Answer 14

i know

Answer 15

can you edit it and about OS too, what i mean about that is not Os this site = Openstudy with your classmate etc.

Answer 16

yah

Answer 17

my other story is going good they featured it on hub my sister help me do that but she go to work now and busy..But the one i send to you is my own story and grammar. http://kingkos.hubpages.com/

Answer 18

haha nice.

Answer 19

please some one revise my story

Answer 20

im working on it :)

Answer 21

wow thank you slahrichi godbless

Answer 22

Glad I can help :)