Question

ok, I need another pair of eyes to see what i missed

Answer 1

The Blew Bare
Their once was a blew bare who had an exceptable job as an ade to a wealthy man. This bare tried deserts and smelled cented candles all day long. After a while he had to say by to his employer because he gained two much wait and was not aloud on the train. His doctor had adviced him to lift steal and right down all the food that he eight throughout the day. He then joined the gym and rode won stationery bike in the mourning. This was the best advise anyone had ever given him.

He was not longer feeling blew about being to large for the train because he new that their were many things for a bare too due two get healthy. A few months later he went too the train for a ride. The train officials no longer said, “Your two big for this train, “butt invited him in for a ride. Bare new that from this day on he would take his health seriously. He even wrote a blog to share with others.

The Blue Bear
There once was a blue bear who had an acceptable ob as an aid to a wealthy man. This bear tried desserts and smelled scented candles all day long. After a while he had to say goodbye to his employers because he gained too much weight and was not allowed on the train. His doctor had advised him to lift steel and write down all the food that he ate throughout the day. He then joined the gym and rode one stationary bike in the morning. This was the best advice anyone had ever given him.
He was no longer feeling blue about being too large for the train because he knew that there were many things for a bear to do to get healthy. A few months later he went to the train for a ride. The train officials no longer said “You’re too big for this train,” but invited him in for a ride. Bear knew that from this day on he would take his health seriously. He even wrote a blog to share with others.

Answer 2

the top one is the one she gave me to revise the bottom one is my revision. She told me i missed a lot of homonyms which stinks cuz i thought i got all of them =/ but oh well

Answer 3

@she-walks-in

There once was a blue bear who had an acceptable [?ob] as an [?aid] to a wealthy

There's a missing j in the first line. Also, is the bear an AID or an AIDE? There is a difference. Check the dictionary.

Check to see if "goodbye" should by hyphenated.