Question

I had to write a story about a red blood cell trveling through the circulatory system.. I decided to give it a Jamaican accent...... does this sound okay? ->

Hey. What go on, mon? I’m a red blood cell, much like the ones in your own circulatory system. I’m going to tell you all about my journey through the “river of life”. It’s a personal story, mon, so clean your ears out.
It all started at the old ticker, it seemed like the normal journey that we’d traveled oh so many times before. I, like all the other red blood cells, was thrilled to play such an important role; carrying life through