Question

Chapter 4 of Land of Youth.
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Answer 1

Chapter 4
“Come let us meet him. I do not wish to send messages that will be confused and not said properly,” Queen Anna said as Prince Edward raged on about how that just ruined his day of lessons.
“So you’re saying you don’t trust me?” the footman asked.
“Of course I trust you, but not for a long message,” Queen Anna replied.
They went to the meeting room to summon a priest and went to the main room.
There they encountered a muscular prince Anna’s mouth dropped open.
“I came down just to meet a guy like this? No, I will not divorce my husband. I demand to know your name,” Queen Anna said forcibly for she wanted to sound like the rightful queen of Sativa would sound. She kept her head up high so as not to let her crown fall off her head.
“My name is Prince Sanford of Avon. I see you have already been crowned queen but your brother has not been crowned king. Why is that?” he asked quite cruelly.
“Because he is still being taught,” Anna said like a professor. “Why do you interrupt my teaching? Come back in a few days and I will tell you if I will divorce him or not. If I do not agree then, then you and I can talk about this in public. Now do you want it be public or secret?” she asked.
“I do not wish for it be public,” Prince Sanford said sheepishly.
“I will not allow my daughter to marry a commoner. Go back to Ridgeview with you,” King Gordon said meaningfully.
“How did you know? I bought this uniform from the prince there.”
“So now you give yourself away without my help? Queen Anna’s biological father had met you commoner on the road to the divorce. You had advised him to take my wife’s money and jewelry.” Gordon reached over and took the necklace that Sanford was wearing and handed it over to Marianna. “And by the way this is hers.”
“Now it is my daughter’s since she became queen. It is always given to the next generation, which is you the true queen,” she said. “And my husband has something for you if you become king,” Marianna said to Prince Edward who smiled in delight.
“I will learn more if she will still be my tutor. I will do my best and become your king,” Prince Edward vowed.
“Well you should have been doing your best before I started teaching. As for you Prince Sanford, if that is your name, to the dungeon you go,” Queen Anna said.
A few guards walked in, took the man, and pulled him to the dungeon, which would mean going by the meeting room, in which the door was open.
“You there, run and close the meeting room doors. I do not wish for them to see that I just incarcerated this prince,” said Queen Anna to a nearby idle servant. “That will give you something to do.”
“No one should be idle in this castle,” King Gordon declared.
“With everyone in the meeting room there is nothing for us to do, Your Highness,” the servant said.
“Well make appetizers and refreshments for them and us; that aught to keep everybody busy. Hurry and close the door they are nearing the entrance,” King Gordon yelled.
The servant ran to the door, but tripped before she got to the door. The guards went past without even noticing the door was open.

Answer 2

Needs to be a comma in between prince and Anna's:
There they encountered a muscular prince, Anna’s mouth dropped open.

Shouldn't the you be your:
had met you(r) commoner on the road to the divorce


Other than those few things, its great!