can somebody check my essay and tell me how it is please thanks

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sup_open~study · Answer

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anonymous · Answer

this is reeeally good, but i think you jumped into your topic too quick.

sup_open~study · Answer

yeah i thought the same thing xD i have problems fitting it all in to one paper lol

anonymous · Answer

try using an "attention grabber".

sup_open~study · Answer

do you have an suggestions xD i can't think of any thing lol

anonymous · Answer

hmm... well.. let's think, what would make someone in your targeted age group be like "WOAH I WANNA READ THAT"?

dean.shyy · Answer

Please check the attached file.

sup_open~study · Answer

@Dean.Shyy You rock !!!!! Thanks man

sup_open~study · Answer

@brookie5150 sorry for the late reply i had to change classes and did not have a chance to get back on xD is this a good idea should i start out with an quote from the story to make them want to keep on reading ??

dean.shyy · Answer

Remember to put your essay into 5 paragraphs.

1) Introduction
2) 1st Paragraph
3) 2nd Paragraph
4) 3rd Paragraph
5) Conclusion

dean.shyy · Answer

Specifically, make sure you include at least 4-5 sentences for each paragraph.

1) Opening statement of what you want to talk about in this paragraph
2) Sentence & Supporting facts
3) Sentence & Supporting facts
4) Sentence & Supporting facts
5) Closing remark of what you said in the paragraph

sup_open~study · Answer

@Dean.Shyy wow dude thank you so much i really appreciate it !!!