Question

guys i need feedback someone commet, pease?

when i was little, daddy you told me nothin would hurt me, you lied. the fightin and the lies, rejection, the silence, hurts. mommy you said someone would be there to help catch me, no ones there and i fell straight to the ground. i cried tonight wishing for the pain to end. just waitin for someone to finally be there, that i can depend on. to fall for, to talk to. im waitin, waitin for you. whoever you are, ill be the maiden waitin for that somone to take me away and save me. no more lies, i want to feel, be whole again.

Answer 1

thats so sad..... :/
i totally understand this..
i have those very feelings!
just i never thought about them really i have always been positive about my past n wow that was just touching....

Answer 2

um thanks. :) im tryin to move on better.

Answer 3

welcome.

Answer 4

:)

Answer 5

aww thats so sad that put a tear in my eye!!

Answer 6

Aww that is a very good poem... I love it!!!

Answer 7

Its really pretty :) its so touching, god job!

Answer 8

*good

Answer 9

awwwhh this is so depressing! don't worry some will will come for you:]

Answer 10

Aweee this is soooo touching...... Someone will be there for you...

Answer 11

unicorn buddy that is so touching and the poem made me cry

Answer 12

thts deep nice work:)

Answer 13

i didnt want u guys to cry.

Answer 14

i might be a guy but i realkly liked this:)

Answer 15

thnks.

Answer 16

anytime:)

Answer 17

:)

Answer 18

thnk for ur guys feedback. i luv u guys. commet on my other poems please.