Identify the problem with the following sentence.
Thelma was the person who wrote the sales manual originally in the beginning
use of passive voice
wordiness
inconsistent style

Question

Identify the problem with the following sentence.
 Thelma was the person who wrote the sales manual originally in the beginning
 use of passive voice
 wordiness
 inconsistent style

anonymous · Answer

'originally' and 'in the beginning' are very similar words, so it is redundant to write both.

snuggielad · Answer

square is correct on this...it is very redundant to use...i dont understand your answer choices here or if you just need that answer but i suppose it is wordiness...if that is a choice...

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alexanderphantomhive · Answer

B. Wordiness